Do me a favor please kill me!

Friday, February 27, 2009 , 16 Comments




Hurtful words sliced through
twisted and turned, drawing blood
You achieved what you set to do..
But are you happy? I am not so sure...

The day dawned, bright and warm
Memories so crude and strong
prisoned inside a vacuum cell
could see you watching me struggle.

your face keep popping through
the creased mind acts like a sleuth
no corner hidden enough
you rip through vein and blood.

you sit on my head
and refuse to budge
what do i do to move ahead?
what is that I asked of you?
a little smile
a little hug
a little love
to live through....

oh! it's so dull and grey
nothing waits for the day
ignored people who waved at me
Do me a favor please kill me!

Viji

Some say he’s half man half fish, others say he’s more of a seventy/thirty split. Either way he’s a fishy bastard. Google

16 Candles:

Good one viji. As i said earlier...it flows out of you.

Viji said...

thanks vandya :)

Opaque said...

A good one!!! I am probably in songwriting mode, hence an instant tune pops into my head. Pardon me for that. A nice spot you have got here!!!

Viji said...

hey thanks Brosreview :) i'm honoured... music and poetry is my life...

Viji said...

I went through your blog Ajey, it's breathtaking... i would really love to hear the tune for my lines. i have always heard other's sing but never once thought that my lines can be musical too....touched...

Opaque said...

@Viji - Oh, thank you!!! I am glad you like my spot.

Umm, your poems can be musical as well. If I come with a tune, I shall inform you.

And, yea, most people start following a blog and don't think about checking out the old posts. I am different. Hence, I replied to the older ones here.

Cheers!!!

Asha Sundar said...

chanceless viji, i really liked this post....

Viji said...

thanks asha:)

Excellent Viji. Your imagery is wonderful. I'm glad you stopped. Now I have found You!

love-bd

Anonymous said...

nice one..

do you have a tune for this?

when that face pops up again, just punch the nose on that face

Viji said...

hahaha... i would just love to do that... tune? u think there's a song hidden in there? you are the second person who had asked me this...
whenever i read this piece i read it as a poem...song? am not sure...no need to add that you are an amazing writer... i spent 4 hours reading ur blog yesterday... laughed my heart out.kudos chriz...

Anonymous said...

thanks.. am honoured.. bows down...

am checking your poems.. nice ones

Viji said...

and am reading ur poems chriz :)

sudharm baxi said...

Loved the piece, very nicely executed is what i would say..

and i am following you, for further similar pieces in future..

Very vivid =). I like your word choices

Viji said...

thank you gemini by nature :)

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